It’s the last day of Voice Week! It’s been really fun! This week I’ve posted a small bit from the point of view of different characters characters from my science-fiction series Subsapien doing a scene each day for five days to strengthen the voice of each character. The voice is the individual thought pattern of the character and how they see the world. I’ve already posted snippets from Bryce’s, Matt’s, Ingrid’s and Emil’s points of views. Brian’s snippet is the last one! I hope you guys like it. ^ ^
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| Brian |
Brian sat in the corner of the test room, rocking,
holding his injured arm and holding back his tears. He should not cry like a
child. Adults do not cry. The day he physically matched his mental prowess
could not come soon enough.
holding his injured arm and holding back his tears. He should not cry like a
child. Adults do not cry. The day he physically matched his mental prowess
could not come soon enough.
The door opened. His handler set a small ceramic
bowl of pallid spheres upon the ground, then promptly exited.
bowl of pallid spheres upon the ground, then promptly exited.
The contents of the bowl strongly resembled … Brian’s
eye bugged and his fluffy, gray tail wagged. Could it be?
eye bugged and his fluffy, gray tail wagged. Could it be?
He crawled close. The item’s milk content and sweet
aroma confirmed it. This was the dessert he had only read about in his Every.
aroma confirmed it. This was the dessert he had only read about in his Every.
Ice Cream.
The moment felt so surreal. Why would the scientist
allow him to have this delicacy? From the coloration it had to be vanilla or
cake batter. No scents of harmful substances emanated from it.
allow him to have this delicacy? From the coloration it had to be vanilla or
cake batter. No scents of harmful substances emanated from it.
Perhaps he could allow himself to act childish. No
one would know but him. Consuming the ice cream would be far easier if he had a
utensil, but would have to make do.
one would know but him. Consuming the ice cream would be far easier if he had a
utensil, but would have to make do.
He scooped some ice cream up with his fingers and slurped
it into his mouth. This substance far surpassed the flavor quality of anything
he had before tasted. He let a big, horribly childish grin spread on his face—that
no would ever, ever hear of.
it into his mouth. This substance far surpassed the flavor quality of anything
he had before tasted. He let a big, horribly childish grin spread on his face—that
no would ever, ever hear of.
What do you think of the excerpt? Have you done Voice Week? Links?
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I get the impression that he is very small and is determined to be viewed as more grown-up because of it. He is knowledgeable, with a higher vocabulary than the others. His thirst for knowledge is kind of related to his desire to be seen as an adult; basically, he wants respect.
You pegged him very well. ^ ^ He's nine. Thank you for commenting!
Haha, I like how grown up he's trying to me. Makes for a strong voice through the piece. Good luck taking these guys forward in the novel.
Thank you. ^ ^
I loved his conflict.. to be himself or not… The grin in the end was adorable!
This made me crave for ice cream! 🙂
Hee hee thank you! Thank you for commenting. ^ ^
ACK HE'S ADORABLE. AND AWESOME. THEY'RE ALL AWESOME AND – 😀
I really should do this too. For fun. It'll help with my 100 for 100.
Thank you. ^ ^ It was really fun. You should. Oh you're doing 100 for 100 too? So am I! Thanks for commenting. 🙂