It’s day two for Voice Week! This week I’m posting a small bit from the point of view of different characters from my science-fiction series Subsapien doing a scene each day for five days to strengthen the voice of each character. The voice of the character is the individual thought pattern of the character and how they see the world. Yesterday, I posted a small bit with Bryce and today I’m going with Matt. Snippets from the point of views of Ingrid, Emil, and Brian will be posted over the week too. ^ ^
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| Matt |
Matt sat on the floor, staring at the one-way glass window in the white test room, his yellow, cat tail curled
around his lower back and ankles. When would they let him see Bryce? Was his brother
okay?
around his lower back and ankles. When would they let him see Bryce? Was his brother
okay?
The invisible door opened on the window wall and
Matt’s handler set a bowl of what looked like snowballs on the floor. Then he
left.
Matt’s handler set a bowl of what looked like snowballs on the floor. Then he
left.
Matt cocked his head. Why would they give him
snowballs? He crawled closer and sniffed. They smelled creamy like milk, but
sweeter and with no scent of drugs. What were these for? They were stacked
almost like a snowman Brian showed him pictures of once. Tiny flecks speckled
them almost like bits of coal.
snowballs? He crawled closer and sniffed. They smelled creamy like milk, but
sweeter and with no scent of drugs. What were these for? They were stacked
almost like a snowman Brian showed him pictures of once. Tiny flecks speckled
them almost like bits of coal.
He touched it with his finger. It was cold but not
icy like snow. Could it be food? Frozen milk? He licked is finger. So good! It
tasted like nothing he’d ever been fed before. If only he could save some for
Bryce.
icy like snow. Could it be food? Frozen milk? He licked is finger. So good! It
tasted like nothing he’d ever been fed before. If only he could save some for
Bryce.
What do you think of the excerpt? Have you done Voice Week? Links?
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Seems very contemplative and thoughtful.
He is. ^ ^ Thanks for commenting!
I like how this voice is a little similar to Bryce's, showing that they're brothers, but clearly more calm and with more experience.
Oh cool. I didn't mean to make them similar, but that works out great. XD Matt is far more knowledgeable than Bryce is. Thank you for commenting. 🙂
Much calmer, but still with a healthy hint of cynicism. I like how he's thinking of his brother the whole time. I also like how you've put both in the same situation but had them react completely differently.
Thank you. 🙂 You're getting at his character. It's really hard to show him in such a small bit. Thank you for commenting. 🙂
This one has a better handle of the situation than the previous one. Very different and distinct from before. And a very unique premise you have in general. I am enjoying this.
Thank you. 🙂 They are very different characters. ^ ^ Thank you for commenting.
This voice is more trusting than the previous one.
Yes, he is. ^ ^ Thanks for commenting. 🙂
Definitely distinct from the previous voice! This one is more intelligent. Hmm, perhaps this cat-human species is not less intelligent than humans, and that was just Bryce.
Thanks. 🙂 Well they've never seen ice cream before in their lives at this point. ^ ^' So it's more like naivete. Thanks for commenting. 🙂